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Eternal Love

This poem is my submission to a challenge to respond to another poet’s piece.  She was writing about the challenge of responding to romantic advances by someone twenty years her junior.  I responded with this piece from the youngster’s perspective.  I think it came out pretty well. 🙂

Eternal Love

Eternal love sings a melody in my heart when I see you smile.

You worry about the price I pay to cup your heart in my hands,

But you don’t understand

That I see eternity when I gaze into your eyes;

You leave me mesmerized!

I don’t see a difference when I gaze at you and me:

I see two hearts beating with same rhythm, same chords met

As we link lives in a shared journey to forever…

You worry that I will want someone my own age –

But all I see is someone who accepts me exactly as I am –

That means more to me than setting myself up on a stage

Of disappointment as they – though equal in years –

never figure out how to allay my fears and make me smile.

I have that in you.


I want to hold you at night, kiss you just right,

Make you remember what it feels to be young again…

I want to make you complete, more than between the sheets,

I want to commit to forever with you.


I want to spend my eternity making you smile every day.

Not having you worry that I will trade you in for a newer model

With fresh paint, greater horsepower and more curves.

You can be assured that I disdain the new for the classic;

I’m more at ease with you.

And don’t worry about us reproducing our love

In photocopies of our mutual connection…

We can always adopt

Or I can spend my entire life consumed with the pursuit

Of displaying my affection for you

Without the pitter patter of little feet.

Don’t worry anymore, my darling, my love…

I commit to you forever, I won’t ever stray…

My eyes and my heart are only for you, my love

So take my hand and let us walk into forever…


About PassionPoet

Wordsmith. Spoken word artist. I inhale words and exhale poetry.....


9 thoughts on “Eternal Love

  1. How sweet are your words.. my heart is so mushy right now…

    I hope she loves what you wrote here…. I would say YES ~


    Posted by Heaven | September 6, 2011, 9:12 PM
  2. A fitting response I’m sure…would love to read the piece you wrote to. Words well spun, and the subject…familiar 🙂 Happy OpenLinkNight!


    Posted by tashtoo | September 6, 2011, 9:37 PM
  3. nice…this is a great reassurance and speaks to a love that is greater than most you will find…it does not come cheap…good on you…


    Posted by brian | September 6, 2011, 11:17 PM
  4. Speaks so of love such a wonderful piece thank you so much


    Posted by Sarah Johnston | September 7, 2011, 1:40 AM
  5. So take my hand and let us walk into forever…


    This whole poem makes me weep … love it!


    Posted by Sereneprincess | May 25, 2012, 2:17 AM

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