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Response


I was given some news tonight that left me feeling furious.  I probably don’t need to spell it out once you have read the poem.  I just had to release this piece before going to bed.  It really probably should be kept private, but heck – this is my blog. Read if you feel like it.  Sorry for the surly tone, but I’m still coming off of my anger and now I am still trying to be able to sleep. 

Response

This is the perfect time to write – not about sex.

Your news floored me, made me mad, I’m blue vex* –

Made my head get hot and blood turn ice cold –

You gave up what you promised you’d keep sacred; unsold.

You didn’t promise me, yet I still feel betrayed;

What happened to the resolution and decision you made?

Wondering what he did to deserve such a gift?

Nothing!

I did not mean to be jealous, though that is there too,

But my feelings are hurt more because you became untrue

To yourself; you swore he wouldn’t be able to cross

The River to the treasure he sought after, his loss

Was your gain, we decided together –

And then he squandered our commitment.

I’m angry and hurt, now I can’t even sleep,

Thinking of your news has got me in some deep

Shit. I can feel the blood pass my nose

And my temples are throbbing; my night’s repose

Is cast off as I sit staring off in the dark.

I just had to turn my lights back on, allow the spark

Of anger to germinate a poem or prose

Or something… I just had to get out

All the passion I’m feeling; stopped me

Staring at the ceiling. God damn you’re making me rhyme

Something I don’t usually do – not at every line!

But I have to express all the feelings I have boiling inside ….

And then to release them until they subside

And the raging emotion starts to cool and calm down….

Now maybe I can sleep, ease the pain of let down –

And awake to the new day, putting last night aside.

2011.07.12

Footnotes –

* Blue Vex – a Barbadian slang term for being extremely angry.

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Discussion

19 thoughts on “Response

  1. I like dis.
    I like the angry thats there. The rhyming helped it go/flow.
    (side note: DAMN She bad ting-dont deal with she again) but anyway, poem was great. Couplet like but maybe more rhyme style (GREAT)

    now is it bue vex or blue vex? in the poem you said bue but your footnotes say blue (FYI)

    I think angry / heartbreak poems are written the best all the time.

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    Posted by Da Poets Corner dot com | July 12, 2011, 3:28 PM
  2. Dear Rob… love the poem, sorry someone made you (justifiably) angry.

    To be honest, I came here looking for sex (the poetry kind) but was still glad to find something that touched me, made me remember times when someone did me wrong, too.

    Sucks, I know.

    Fwiw… I checked out your profile pick at your other site, and you are one handsome man. Someone is sure to regret their choices.

    Hugs to you… : )

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    Posted by Linda | July 13, 2011, 3:58 AM
    • Hi Linda! *waves*

      Firstly, thanks for visiting! I’m so glad you came! *shuffles papers off the couch* Forgive the mess 🙂 I was creating 🙂

      I have started writing a lot more and have recently redefined myself as the PassionPoet 🙂 because as I realized being Bajanpoet in a room full of Bajan poets is …. well… redundant 🙂 I won’t change my internet nick, but this is how I see myself now as well. I will always be bajanpoet, because it has been my internet persona for soooo long. But when I’m reciting my pieces in open mic sessions – they will hear Passion throughout my performance and my topics.

      With that in mind, I have been challenged to write about more than sex, because there is more to passion than sexual passion – and this poem is right up that alley. I was so mad I HAD to write to get out all my emotions in order to sleep …

      Is this the first time you came to the site? Because if you were ‘looking for (poetry) sex’ you can just go back a ways in the archives – the blog isn’t old enough for the archives to be massive yet 🙂 Conversations, and Worship are all good 🙂 And I have a couple more that I’m refining before I put them up 🙂

      *shy* Thanks for the compliment …. I don’t usually feel handsome…..

      Hugs right back…. please come back again – I’m on a poetic journey especially this week, as I am doing a poem workshop every day for this week. My writing can only improve from here!

      Love you! (and btw – what does ‘fwiw’ mean? LOL)

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      Posted by bajanpoet | July 13, 2011, 6:29 AM
  3. ugh man, stings…i can understand why you are angry if this is what it is…glad you let it out though…passion makes for great poetry you know….nice write

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    Posted by brian miller | January 3, 2012, 8:23 PM
  4. Way to use the anger Bajan. Nothing more cathartic than writing.

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    Posted by darkangelwrites | January 3, 2012, 8:39 PM
  5. The anger of betrayal is one of the strongest emotions there is–you express it well here. I hate that feeling, it makes my stomach clench and my vision blurr. Hope this poem helped you finally get some sleep.

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    Posted by hedgewitch | January 3, 2012, 8:40 PM
  6. glad you let it out…to write it down helps a lot..also to sort the thoughts…tough stuff..heavily emotional.. felt..

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    Posted by claudia | January 3, 2012, 9:14 PM
  7. You getting it out of your system (maybe not all of it) made for an enjoyable read. Yes, your passion does come through loud and clear. Sorry for your pain…may it pass quickly.

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    Posted by Bodhirose | January 3, 2012, 10:13 PM
  8. There is no better way to rant than with force and rhyme. Nothing simmers me down better than the release of the words, and I am honored that you have shared yours with us here. There is healing that comes with ink…and time of course. You always need a little time! Hope you’re feeling a bit better…and thanks much for your birthday wishes. May your pen stand strong in 2012!

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    Posted by tashtoo | January 4, 2012, 12:29 AM
  9. man oh man, do I feel you on this one! I’m pretty sure you will understand if you stop by and read mine…

    http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2012/01/03/look-me-in-the-eye-when-you-say-goodbye/

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    Posted by Kellie Elmore | January 4, 2012, 1:16 AM
  10. Rant away..its good for your system. Hope you feel better…

    wishing you Happy New Year ~

    Cheers ~

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    Posted by Heaven | January 4, 2012, 2:17 AM
  11. I feel the anger and frustration in every word. Poetry has a way of channeling emotion and slowing the brain to allow thoughts to catch up with emotion. I hope this poem was a freeing write for you and tomorrow is the day you hope it will be.

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    Posted by Beth Winter | January 4, 2012, 3:06 AM
  12. My new year wishes to you Bajan, I hope the inked words spilled on blog made you feel better .. I can sense your anger and some frustration in the verse.. Wishing you all the luck in life. Take care

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    Posted by Divya | January 4, 2012, 4:35 AM

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