On the heels of my silver awarded poem Luscious, I wanted to write another poem in the same vein and with the same style. I can’t say any more without giving it away, so please enjoy…
Connoisseur
Fingers playing under pleated skirt
Caressing folds of dark, dusky desire
I sample scented rosebud, taking you in.
First taste, my knees buckle;
Fall at your feet
Eyes close instinctively
Low moan escapes my lips
As easily as Houdini slipping from
Lock and chain
I lick slowly, excitement builds….
Holding still
As emotion’s tsunami rushes around me
Transporting me to heaven
I nibble your bit playfully, your
Chocolate flesh moist
Shivering desire takes me
As I take you
Hoisting your ambrosia cup
To fevered lips
Feverish sips
Till you are all consumed
With lust
For just another taste
Just another nibble….
I dribble over you
Until you come
Until you went
Until each crumb
Is eaten, well spent….
The cupcake is
Consumed
And I am
Content…
PS – I’ve been having friendly debate with a fellow poet who loves the poem but doesn’t like the title. What do you think I should call it? 🙂
UPDATE – My blog friend Loly (from http://ahhhpoetry.wordpress.com/) suggested “CUNNOISSEUR” with the deliberate spelling rather than “Fellatio” … I like it!
UPDATE # 2 – As I am all for not giving things away at the very start, I’m going to rename this piece with the original spelling of “Connoisseur” – it will allow the reader to guess what the poem is about (and still be wrong LOL!) But this way, it won’t give anything away – not even the sexiness of the poem itself … Thanks for all the help, my friends 🙂 Enjoy the poem 😉
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I concur, Fellatio implies that a man is the object of desire, but what you write sounds like a woman is the object of desire, so the title needs to be more womanly. How about “CUNNOISSEUR” with the change in spelling for obvious reasons.
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I love that… I used “Fellatio” because I am using my mouth but *I* am getting the pleasure, but your title fits so well ….. thanks so much Loly <333
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I changed it – I LOVE your play on the word …. I was wracking my brain trying to figure out a proper title for this poem …. GREAT JOB 😀
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I love it….I love your naughty descriptiveness of doing something so innocent and yet with a naughty appeal, much like sucking on a lollipop 🙂
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BTW I loved it!!! It reminds me of my poem “I Crave thee”
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Yeah I remember reading “I Crave Thee.” I loved that piece …. 🙂 Gonna go read it again …
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Just so you know, I was talking about two things that I love to eat simultaneously….popcorn and cotton candy!!!
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hehe I DID wonder what you were eating ….. hehe
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i like the title change an the heat in this…there is satisfaction found in satisfying an other…smiles….
you linked up last weeks poem for dverse again for this weeks, did you mean to?
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I didn’t mean to link last week’s poem 😦 I’m sorry … It was an accident… I didn’t know how to undo it 😦
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Yeah … there IS satisfaction in satisfying someone else …. 🙂 definitely 🙂 Who’s being satisfied here more? 😀
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delicious…enjoyed revisiting this one again…hot hot hot…ha, houdini…smiles.
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I like the poem. It is very sensual and not the least bit subtle. Therefore I would prefer a much more subtle title. Unfortunately I don’t have one for you.
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Raven 🙂 Thanks for commenting 🙂 The fact is it WAS subtle – at least from the fact that it definitely WAS about a cupcake … LOL Thanks for visiting … I realized for some reason my spam monster ate your comment, but I rescued it 🙂
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Oh my! That is one seriously hot cupcake.
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YUP! 😀
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Well Erotic and well written… beautifully spaced with the final thought… liked the title as it is.
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/11/whispers-sighs.html
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Thanks Sashi …. I was in a toss up as to whether to leave the title with the deliberate mis-spelling or have the reader guess with the real spelling of the word. I chose the latter coz I am into metaphors 🙂
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beautiful.
🙂
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Glad you like it 🙂 I’ve subscribed to your blog as well 🙂
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Ha! I love the twist at the end! I was thinking “my my, what a devilishly erotic poem”, but alas, I was fooled! I loved this – cudos to you sir! 🙂
Here’s mine for the rally: Butterflies
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Thanks so much Cherlyn! Come back again!
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hot and sensual write…i like it ~
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First off, I love your style of writing!
I love the easiness this piece reads with. There’s a difference between sexual and sensual. This is clean sensual and I love it!
❤
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For sure there’s a major difference between sexual and sensual 🙂 I’m so glad you liked it!
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Wow! That’s quite a cupcake. I like the title as it is now.
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Victoria! Check out the link to my other poem “Luscious” .. you’ll like that one too!
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“Cupcake” is obviously the best title selection. Or perhaps “Icing” or “Unwrapped.”
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Thanks Shawna… I guess I didn’t want to give away the metaphor at the very beginning in the title, you know? But I do like “Unwrapped”… 🙂
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Great erotica
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Thanks so much marousia! 🙂
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a very erotic piece…i kind of agree on the title…its got a cold calculated feel to it…contrasting your poem
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Thanks Brian! Never saw the title like that before, but I love the contrast!
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See I read this before ~ nice sensual piece ~
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Yeah I have a couple other food pieces I have in Drafts but haven’t been able to focus on them to finish them… 🙂 Thanks Heaven ❤
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whew…can someone open a window please…? smiles…hot and delicious write
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Thanks Claudia ❤
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