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On the heels of my silver awarded poem Luscious, I wanted to write another poem in the same vein and with the same style. I can’t say any more without giving it away, so please enjoy…
Connoisseur
Fingers playing under pleated skirt
Caressing folds of dark, dusky desire
I sample scented rosebud, taking you in.
First taste, my knees buckle;
Fall at your feet
Eyes close instinctively
Low moan escapes my lips
As easily as Houdini slipping from
Lock and chain
I lick slowly, excitement builds….
Holding still
As emotion’s tsunami rushes around me
Transporting me to heaven
I nibble your bit playfully, your
Chocolate flesh moist
Shivering desire takes me
As I take you
Hoisting your ambrosia cup
To fevered lips
Feverish sips
Till you are all consumed
With lust
For just another taste
Just another nibble….
I dribble over you
Until you come
Until you went
Until each crumb
Is eaten, well spent….
The cupcake is
Consumed
And I am
Content…
PS – I’ve been having friendly debate with a fellow poet who loves the poem but doesn’t like the title. What do you think I should call it? 🙂
UPDATE – My blog friend Loly (from http://ahhhpoetry.wordpress.com/) suggested “CUNNOISSEUR” with the deliberate spelling rather than “Fellatio” … I like it!
UPDATE # 2 – As I am all for not giving things away at the very start, I’m going to rename this piece with the original spelling of “Connoisseur” – it will allow the reader to guess what the poem is about (and still be wrong LOL!) But this way, it won’t give anything away – not even the sexiness of the poem itself … Thanks for all the help, my friends 🙂 Enjoy the poem 😉
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Passion's Pleasure 
I concur, Fellatio implies that a man is the object of desire, but what you write sounds like a woman is the object of desire, so the title needs to be more womanly. How about “CUNNOISSEUR” with the change in spelling for obvious reasons.
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Posted by Loly | November 22, 2011, 4:17 PMI love that… I used “Fellatio” because I am using my mouth but *I* am getting the pleasure, but your title fits so well ….. thanks so much Loly <333
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Posted by bajanpoet | November 22, 2011, 4:45 PMI changed it – I LOVE your play on the word …. I was wracking my brain trying to figure out a proper title for this poem …. GREAT JOB 😀
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Posted by bajanpoet | November 22, 2011, 7:49 PMI love it….I love your naughty descriptiveness of doing something so innocent and yet with a naughty appeal, much like sucking on a lollipop 🙂
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Posted by ahhhpoetry | November 23, 2011, 2:44 AMBTW I loved it!!! It reminds me of my poem “I Crave thee”
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Posted by Loly | November 22, 2011, 4:17 PMYeah I remember reading “I Crave Thee.” I loved that piece …. 🙂 Gonna go read it again …
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Posted by bajanpoet | November 22, 2011, 4:46 PMJust so you know, I was talking about two things that I love to eat simultaneously….popcorn and cotton candy!!!
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Posted by Loly | November 22, 2011, 5:50 PMhehe I DID wonder what you were eating ….. hehe
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Posted by bajanpoet | November 22, 2011, 6:25 PMi like the title change an the heat in this…there is satisfaction found in satisfying an other…smiles….
you linked up last weeks poem for dverse again for this weeks, did you mean to?
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Posted by brian miller | November 22, 2011, 9:05 PMI didn’t mean to link last week’s poem 😦 I’m sorry … It was an accident… I didn’t know how to undo it 😦
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Posted by bajanpoet | November 23, 2011, 2:52 AMYeah … there IS satisfaction in satisfying someone else …. 🙂 definitely 🙂 Who’s being satisfied here more? 😀
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Posted by bajanpoet | November 23, 2011, 3:00 AMdelicious…enjoyed revisiting this one again…hot hot hot…ha, houdini…smiles.
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Posted by brian miller | April 27, 2012, 3:42 PMI like the poem. It is very sensual and not the least bit subtle. Therefore I would prefer a much more subtle title. Unfortunately I don’t have one for you.
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Posted by Old Raven | November 22, 2011, 10:03 PMRaven 🙂 Thanks for commenting 🙂 The fact is it WAS subtle – at least from the fact that it definitely WAS about a cupcake … LOL Thanks for visiting … I realized for some reason my spam monster ate your comment, but I rescued it 🙂
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Posted by bajanpoet | November 25, 2011, 6:39 PMOh my! That is one seriously hot cupcake.
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Posted by darkangelwrites | November 23, 2011, 3:38 AMYUP! 😀
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Posted by bajanpoet | November 23, 2011, 12:34 PMWell Erotic and well written… beautifully spaced with the final thought… liked the title as it is.
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/11/whispers-sighs.html
At Twitter @VerseEveryDay
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Posted by Shashi (@VerseEveryDay) | November 23, 2011, 9:38 AMThanks Sashi …. I was in a toss up as to whether to leave the title with the deliberate mis-spelling or have the reader guess with the real spelling of the word. I chose the latter coz I am into metaphors 🙂
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Posted by bajanpoet | November 23, 2011, 12:35 PMbeautiful.
🙂
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Posted by The Orange Tree | November 23, 2011, 7:13 PMGlad you like it 🙂 I’ve subscribed to your blog as well 🙂
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Posted by bajanpoet | November 25, 2011, 12:37 PMHa! I love the twist at the end! I was thinking “my my, what a devilishly erotic poem”, but alas, I was fooled! I loved this – cudos to you sir! 🙂
Here’s mine for the rally: Butterflies
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Posted by Cherlyn | November 26, 2011, 4:17 PMThanks so much Cherlyn! Come back again!
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Posted by bajanpoet | November 29, 2011, 12:50 PMhot and sensual write…i like it ~
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Posted by Heaven | November 30, 2011, 1:14 AMFirst off, I love your style of writing!
I love the easiness this piece reads with. There’s a difference between sexual and sensual. This is clean sensual and I love it!
❤
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Posted by Nekisha CD Lewis | December 2, 2011, 12:11 AMFor sure there’s a major difference between sexual and sensual 🙂 I’m so glad you liked it!
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Posted by bajanpoet | December 2, 2011, 12:26 AMWow! That’s quite a cupcake. I like the title as it is now.
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Posted by Victoria C. Slotto | April 27, 2012, 5:08 PMVictoria! Check out the link to my other poem “Luscious” .. you’ll like that one too!
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Posted by bajanpoet | April 27, 2012, 5:09 PM“Cupcake” is obviously the best title selection. Or perhaps “Icing” or “Unwrapped.”
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Posted by Shawna | April 28, 2012, 2:22 AMThanks Shawna… I guess I didn’t want to give away the metaphor at the very beginning in the title, you know? But I do like “Unwrapped”… 🙂
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Posted by bajanpoet | April 28, 2012, 2:38 AMGreat erotica
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Posted by marousia | April 28, 2012, 2:50 AMThanks so much marousia! 🙂
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Posted by bajanpoet | April 28, 2012, 3:15 AMa very erotic piece…i kind of agree on the title…its got a cold calculated feel to it…contrasting your poem
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Posted by brian miller | October 7, 2012, 8:18 PMThanks Brian! Never saw the title like that before, but I love the contrast!
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Posted by bajanpoet | October 8, 2012, 3:20 PMSee I read this before ~ nice sensual piece ~
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Posted by Heaven (@asweetlust) | October 8, 2012, 1:50 AMYeah I have a couple other food pieces I have in Drafts but haven’t been able to focus on them to finish them… 🙂 Thanks Heaven ❤
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Posted by bajanpoet | October 8, 2012, 3:07 PMwhew…can someone open a window please…? smiles…hot and delicious write
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Posted by Claudia Schönfeld | October 8, 2012, 3:39 AMThanks Claudia ❤
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Posted by bajanpoet | October 8, 2012, 3:05 PM