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Goodbye…


This poem was inspired by some heart shattering news I got yesterday afternoon, as well as the photo prompt from Dverse Poetry Pub’s Poetics feature – Awareness of the Experience.  I have taken this shot – which, the artist says, is based in Barbados (where I’ve lived all my life) – and wrote a poem around it. So first, the photo print, and then the poem.  Enjoy….

Ashes Ceremony in Barbados

Goodbye…

Wailing incantation’s ebb and flow

releases the loss

Pouring pain from earthen vessel

Scattered ashes gently borne away

by Yemaya’s breast

Gently rest emblems of remembrance

upon throbbing heart

Commemorating life

Observing passing

Acknowledging emptiness

Watching hope drift on the surface of time

And fade into the distance…

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40 thoughts on “Goodbye…

  1. Deep sorrow, the helplessness of having no control over the loss, expressed in eloquent beauty.

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    Posted by Dorianna (paintswithwords) | March 4, 2012, 5:28 AM
  2. I can relate to your words, sorrow very beautifully expressed~

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    Posted by lscotthoughts | March 4, 2012, 7:16 AM
  3. very deep emotions in this..def. the feeling that some things connect here…that you know the place..literally.. and the personal pain weaving into the pic…Pouring pain from earthen vessel… beautifully expressed..

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    Posted by claudia | March 4, 2012, 8:21 AM
  4. Such sadness and such truth in those final lines, but they bring the poem alive.

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    Posted by David King | March 4, 2012, 9:33 AM
  5. i am sorry, your feelings def flow through your words…watching hope drift on desires surface is a great line….nice write man

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    Posted by brian miller | March 4, 2012, 11:54 AM
  6. This is beautiful and very moving….I hope and pray that you are able to move and remember the best of times ~

    (aka Heaven)

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    Posted by Grace | March 4, 2012, 12:44 PM
  7. Sorrows and memory washed by the sea into new, unforeseen tomorrows. You have gently reminded me of how death is perhaps not just an end but perhaps a beginning. The living must go on, but so too those we love who have passed on to unknown horizons.

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    Posted by Chazinator | March 4, 2012, 4:13 PM
  8. emotional piece – keep writing about it, if you’re like me it may be your saving grace for such painful times. those last two lines are very moving. love and light your way…

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    Posted by Sheila | March 4, 2012, 5:12 PM
  9. Acknowledging emptiness hit home for me…exactly how I felt when my best friend passed…my mother. Nice job.

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    Posted by wurdz | March 4, 2012, 7:28 PM
  10. The grief of losing someone dearly loved…. how powerful this piece is! Breaks my heart and makes me long for those who have gone…

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    Posted by Janice | March 7, 2012, 11:57 PM
  11. Beautiful my friend. Thank you for reflecting on my piece. Lovely emotional expression of saying goodbye.
    Walter
    Going to subscribe to your blog…

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    Posted by walterwsmith3rd | March 8, 2012, 3:26 AM
  12. So hard to say goodbye to something you love…it’s closing a door to part of your life that must be released. I feel your pain…

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    Posted by 1emeraldcity | March 8, 2012, 4:32 AM
  13. Your poetry is excellent!

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    Posted by lmwills1 | March 8, 2012, 6:06 PM
  14. Grief is a harsh, hard, difficult emotion. You describe it all too well…

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    Posted by Lindy Lee | March 8, 2012, 9:20 PM
  15. Absolutely beautiful, heartbreakingly so. And I am so sorry for this loss. A beautiful tribute to this personal loss.

    Lady Nyo

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    Posted by ladynyo | March 28, 2012, 8:09 AM
  16. yemaya- she gave birth to all the worlds water?? some very sad and powerful words here…and very sorry to hear about your grief…i hope you find healing through family/friends and of course- writing…..thank you for sharing

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    Posted by poemsofhateandhope | August 11, 2012, 9:09 PM
    • Thanks so much man! I wrote it to process my pain … it was a metaphorical piece about a failure of a potential relationship… so I’m glad that it evokes such emotions 🙂 It is also an old piece, so the pain is long past 🙂

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      Posted by bajanpoet | August 13, 2012, 5:07 PM
  17. I am sorry for whatever loss you’ve experienced. You’ve done a beautiful job of letting your words spill some of that grief out. The ‘throbbing heart’ image is definitely a strong standout for me. May you experience a bit of comfort and relief from the sadness soon.

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    Posted by Lori McClure (@lorimcspeaks) | August 11, 2012, 11:36 PM
    • Thanks … this is an old piece, about the death of a potential relationship… and since then I’ve moved on 🙂 So yeah I got comfort in writing this and was able to move past my pain. Thanks so much for your kind words … I’m glad that the imagery stuck out for you!

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      Posted by bajanpoet | August 13, 2012, 5:06 PM
  18. your poem is very powerful and evocative- i had to find out about yemaya – what a beautiful image. I too am sorry you are grieving

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    Posted by lazywednesdays | August 12, 2012, 6:32 AM
    • Thanks lazywednesday 🙂 In foact, it’s the death of a relationship, not a physical death, and the poem was my way to process my pain. The one who I wrote this poem about and I are good friends now, and I’ve moved on to another relationship 🙂 Thanks so much for your kind words!

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      Posted by bajanpoet | August 13, 2012, 5:04 PM
  19. It’s always hard to say goodbye. Well written!

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    Posted by Daydreamer | August 13, 2012, 1:46 PM

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