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Nine


Remember when you first fell in love? When the world was new and the colours were all bright? Remember how light you felt? Remember those feelings with this poem….

Nine

I can’t feel the ground.

Soaring high  –

up close and personal

with birds on the wing,

cotton candy clouds –

And love’s breath keeping

me aloft.

~*~

I can’t feel the ground.

Floating free

Depression’s ballast dropped

Earth’s topography

fading from view

Heart billowing with

excited exhalations:

ecstatic.

Cotton candy seller in Leon, Guanajuato, Mexico

Cotton candy seller in Leon, Guanajuato, Mexico (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

About PassionPoet

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20 thoughts on “Nine

  1. Ah first love! Yes, it felt like floating on Cloud Nine and was indeed as sweet as cotton candy.

    Thanks for reminding me of the good part.

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    Posted by Raivenne | April 24, 2012, 3:38 PM
  2. Just wonderful! And I love the image you chose to accompany the piece. Never will that first love be forgotten

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    Posted by tashtoo | April 24, 2012, 4:26 PM
  3. like that song walking on sunshine…you know…your feet feel as if they might never land again…yes that is love…smiles…and you are right in that fresh love certainly feels the same…

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    Posted by brian miller | April 24, 2012, 5:48 PM
  4. The high of life when love enters….is so much like this. Never to be forgotten…and thank you for the reminder. Lovely!

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    Posted by 1emeraldcity | April 24, 2012, 10:12 PM
  5. the elixir of Love is so potent that even remembered with a pinch of salt,it releases our blood’s sweet yearn for more soaring…kudos my friend,for this tide of warm wind… 🙂

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    Posted by Edward Rinaldi (@blindedbeatpoet) | April 25, 2012, 12:59 AM
  6. Cool piece. Really nice read. I know it’s minor in the grand scheme of things, but I just love when I read a poem that starts off one way and then in the next stanza or following stanzas, seem as if the opening will be a repeat from the first, yet then change it up- I love that. I can’t feel the ground/Soaring High in the first and then I can’t feel the ground/floating free- is a perfect example of this. A lot of times it will be a dramatic contrast if done, but here you go from soaring to floating, each has a property of flight, yet just slightly different. again, I know it’s but a small portion here, but I just really appreciate this part of the craft. Thanks.

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    Posted by hobgoblin2011 | April 25, 2012, 6:34 AM
    • I loooooove your comments, man. Thanks so much for your in-depth thoughts 🙂 I am really glad when what I write makes someone happy, but it’s awesome when I get a comment like this that shows WHY someone liked the piece 🙂 Thanks so much! Keep commenting!

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      Posted by bajanpoet | April 25, 2012, 12:33 PM
  7. As usual, you excel. I never get tired of reading your work and always wait with baited breath for yours to arrive on Open Link Night.

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    Posted by Aaron Kent - twoinformalfeet.blogspot.com | April 25, 2012, 2:48 PM
  8. Sigh….I love this. The comparison with cotton candy–perfect! I’ll try to not let the heartache of this absent feeling get to me. 🙂 Cool pic at the end, too.

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    Posted by bittersweetverse | April 25, 2012, 5:26 PM
  9. Those days were so woderful, feeling the earth floating under my feet. This calls that emotion up so well!

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    Posted by Chazinator | April 25, 2012, 10:32 PM
  10. Great write! Never let those feelings fade…. Even of they do… Never forget them! They produce great writes …. Lol! Love it !

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    Posted by Mr. Watson | May 12, 2012, 2:33 PM

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