I was talking on Skype and had an awesome metaphor hit me full on … I immediately started writing this poem. Who else feels that love is a gyroscope that keeps one stable?
Stability
Orientation maintained
Momentum sustained
Unaffected by whispered refrains
by lips with jealous stains
on teeth
Acidic gossip attempts to eat
away at resolve’s enamel
but the lies bequeathed
to itching ears fail to alter
focused course
Whispers lashing
Ground teeth gnashing
as one sails forward unaffected
Nothing knocks us to the ground
for we are protected all around
by love’s gyroscope.
woah!! some epiphany! 😀
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ROFL Thanks Archana!
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love certainly wins in the end…and gossip surely erodes at our foundation though…that and lies for sure…tight little write man…
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Thanks so much Brian! Really was looking at this to see if I could improve it, but I couldn’t find anywhere 😉 LOL
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thought this one looked familiar…hope you are having a great week man…
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It was familiar… never posted it here, but did post it in Open Link Monday on Real Toads … I have been busy – and new internet policies mean that I can’t access the internet so readily at work, so … I’ll have to hope that others read the work even tho it’s late in the game….
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very cool..love the image…a comfortable feeling in this..and hey..no wonder..you’re in love…smiles
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I am, aren’t I? *grin* Thanks Claudia ❤
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Now if this isn’t totally brilliant, I don’t know what is.
Love the idea, love the way you lined it up for us and loved your choice of image.
Can’t take my eye off any of this.
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Thanks aprille!!! 😀
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Super flow here. Just rolls and rolls.
Great work.
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🙂 Thanks soooooo much … I love how it sounds out loud! One of my new favourite pieces!
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fascinating metaphor and very well written poem… I guess..if love is at the centre of the gyroscope- it is solid…sometimes surrounded by rapid movement and change…but always solid….or..maybe love is the chaos that holds us all of the chaos together…stops everything from spinning out of control…great concept…totally got me thinking…those first 3 lines are sweet as….so good
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Thank you soooo much … you know I didn’t fully see the rapid movement and change as much as just being buffeted with life, but – you put it so well! Thank you so much!
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Very cool!
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I love this though
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Thanks Marlo! Coming from you that’s a real honour!
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Nice, real cute, hummm, good job, clap clap clap.
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All for you baby *hug*
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An interesting metaphor to use…and such a cool gyroscope …its mesmerizing ~
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Thanks Gracie… I loved the image… I had to put it on the page 😀 mesmerizing for me too …
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Fantastic metaphor. Protection with fluid movement. Nice!
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Thanks honey … *hug*
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“Orientation maintained / Momentum sustained” … perfect. What a cool metaphor!
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Thanks so much Alex! 🙂
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You’re really growing as a poet Robert…think you’re finally getting ‘it’ – distillation, imagery, efficiency, lack of masturbation…. Well done mate. Keep at it.
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Thank you so much Mark … that means a hell of a lot, coming from you. I intend to keep at it 😀
“Lack of masturbation” made me crack up…. I hear you loud and clear…. LOL
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great cadence throughout this, all spinning down to that last phrase at the end, that perfect bit of truth. yes.
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Thanks sooo much Kelly! ❤ Glad you liked it … I love how it sounds on my tongue 🙂
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So well expressed! And I so agree….love protects…not only love for someone else but healthy self love and confidence. Bravo!
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Thanks Jackie! ❤
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It is a great metaphor! A small piece of me wishes there was one more line so that when “gyroscope” hits at the end, it would have rhymed with something before it, just to carry on with the great flow you had throughout. But I know that an unrhymed end makes for good emphasis too.
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I’ll see if I can squeeze in a line before it *grin* Thanks Jessica!
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Beautiful imagery. Loved it.
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Thanks Kim 🙂
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I was falling and falling and then I was caught by a fluffy white cloud. Wonderful piece!
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Great metaphor fir love, which I do believe keeps me up when the world wants to knock me off my feet. The chinese language has an interesting character called the wobbling pivot, which kind of means the same thing that you describe in your piem, though it does not refer to only love.
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Really Chaz? Wobbling Pivot … niiiiice 🙂
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This is indeed a great metaphor. Wise thoughts, too, about how we can undo ourselves and others by our words…a constant struggle.
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Who knew this poet was wise? *grin* Thanks so much Victoria!
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Cool metaphor – love the stabilizing gyroscope – certainly in a lifetime of love there is a lot of spinning and a lot of changing. Children move the center, and age changes and slows the rotation!
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LOL so true abt children and age! Thanks for dropping by!
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clever image choice – it really works here. Nice!
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